Practise

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

Andromeda walked down to the garden. It was a lovely day but she wasn't taking too much notice of her surroundings. She sighed deeply.

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

i was sitting in a bench besides a rose bushes, while reading a muggle book called(true philippine ghost stories book 16). i spotted my friend andy, walking on her own. i called her. "hey, andy." she walks towards me.

as she walks towards me, i placed my book under my book bag in my right, just to make sure no other people or person in the garden saw my ridiculous book.

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

[[ ooc: ok, now notice that you said i walked to you? well try not to do that as my character mightn't want to walk towards you. Do you understand what i'm saying.
Keep it from your perspective. try writing if you can in the third person see if that helps. remember it's only practise so make as many mistakes as you like!]]


Andy looked up and saw Lexi sitting with her book.

[[ooc... I can say this about you because you've already said that this is what you were doing. Whereas in my first thread i never said that i walked to you. ok so far?]]

"Hi Lexi!" she smiled, "can I sit here for a bit?"

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

"yeh sure its free." i said smiling. i moved my book bag and my book on the ground beside the bench on my right. "so whats cooking." i looked at her.

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

[[ great! see your getting it! =D> ]]



"Not alot actually. What were you reading?" Andy had noticed her putting her book away.

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

"nothing!" lexi hides her book away from andy's eye site and tried to change the topic. "so, why are you walking alone. where's micheal." lexi said while smirking.

 

[Brian Getathorn XIX]

((OOC: I hope you don't mind me cutting in, Andy but I notice when you RP you use 'I', please keep in mind that when you RP you should try doing it Third Person. Like how she does,
For Example,

yeh sure its free." i said smiling. i moved my book bag and my book on the ground beside the bench on my right. "so whats cooking." i looked at her

yeh sure its free." Lexi said smiling. Lexi moved her book bag and her book on the ground beside the bench on her right. "so whats cooking."Lexi looked at her

It sounds better and more understandable when you do it the other way, your not required to do this of course but it makes for better RPing. Just some friendly Tips!))[/

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

[[ok, i understand that, i do better next time]]

 

[Brian Getathorn XIX]

((You really are doing a good job and I hope you don't take as us trying to tell you what to do, It just will make it more fun for you as well as the people you RP with in the long run, as well as help you in RL with both socializing as well as communication's through writing/typping!))

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

[[ thank you Brian! so helpful of you to help! told you Lexi that everyone would try and help you!]]


Andy waited for Lexi to respond to her question.

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

[[sorry for my mistakes, i wrote fanfic of myself. so i get along with it.]]



"nothing!" lexi hides her book away from andy's eye site and tried to change the topic. "so, why are you walking alone. where's micheal." lexi said while smirking.

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

[[high - five! girl you got it! ]]


"Michael? You think that there's something going on between me and Michael?" Andy smiled at her shaking her head.

 

[Brian Getathorn XIX]

((That really is a great JOB! makes it so much easier to read! this is because people don't feel like there talking to themselves! ))

((It's no problem to make mistakes when your new!))

((Happy to help Andy! ))

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

"what do you think." lexi said while changing her sitting position and now she's sitting in front of andy, side way's. "you think i'm lying." she said smiling. when silent fell to them both. lexi keeps her eyes on the rose buds on her side and started to pick one.

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

when silent fell to them both.

[[ see in that line... you claimed we both went silent. Whereas I could have started to hum a song or something. only what YOUR character is doing, unless referencing what the other character as already said/ done. ok?]]



"We're actually just friends!" Andy smiled, watching Lexi pick a rose bud.

 

[Michael Anthony Carl Cullen]

[[Mind if i join in? She could practice talking to more than one person it's quite different]]

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

[[yah, you can join, start now]]

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

[[ course you can Michael! join away]]

 

[Michael Anthony Carl Cullen]

Michael thought it neccessary to go for a little walk just to think things over and maybe see a few friendly faces on the way. He was looking at the floor wondering about hippogriffs as he usually did when he heard two feminine voices come from his left he decided to venture over that way.

"Oh hey Andy, How are you?" He said rushed and blushing slighty
"Who's your friend?" He inquired.

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

"Hi Michael!" she smiled at him,"This is Lexi."
Andromeda hoped Lexi wouldn't mention what they had just been talking about.

 

[Michael Anthony Carl Cullen]

"Hey Lexi, so what have you guys been talking about?" He asked in a casual manner

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

"Nothing!" Andromeda thought she had said it a little too quickly and looked at Lexi to see what she would say.

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

"where just talking about hippogriffs." lexi smiled to the boy name micheal. "take a sit."
she insisted.

 

[Andromeda Fiorelli]

Andromeda smiled with relief and winked at her friend.
She turned back to Michael nodding her head, "Hmm Hippogriffs!"

 

[Lexi Rodriguez]

"hippogriffs are interesting, don't you think andy." lexi glanced at andy smirking.